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Hey Guys well this is me and here we go SHORT STORY TIME comment on what you liked and disliked i just thought this up as i type so i'm making it up as i go be as brutally honest about it as you want as long as its true tell me the good the bad and the ugly tyvm here we go

Dalien walked to The Home Away From Home bar.
"God this place is fun to go to cant wait to see who's pissing off who today." he chuckles as he swings open the door. "oh....my....GOD! WHAT HAPPENED HERE!"
The room was littered with dead bodies strewn across the floor from wall to wall with only two men standing the barkeep and a man in a hood he had never seen before. This new hooded man was hardly visible in his blood stained black hoody and black jeans which had metal spiked gloves hanging from the belt loop loosely through the holes in the top of his jeans. He had a long sword sheathed on his back. As Dalien said that he drop the limp body of the bartender and turned to him.
"Where iss the man who leadss your townss army?" he sort of hissed.
"That would be me now why are you here and why have you killed all of these innocent people?" Replied Dalien
He Sighed "Sso the sso called 'Man' i wass ssent for iss thiss child! what a wasste of my time. well hurry up and come with me or elsse ill have to do thiss the hard way." he motioned with his hands to the back door
"i'm not coming with you so hurry up and leave before i call the gaurds on you."
"the gaurdss arn't gonna get close enough to me to do any damage little boy"
"ok first of all you call me little boy one more time and ill cut your obviously forked tonge out of your mouth. secondly why are you so sure of your self?"
"Because little boy i KNOW they cant get anywhere near me because if i dont want them to i wont let them. its called magic little one and if you come with me we will teach you that and oh sso much more."
"ok thats enough talk your pushing it leave or fight"
"well this will be harder then i thought it would. very well bring it on" with that he charged blade all ready drawn and attack Dalien with full force. suddenly after a few attempts at defending himself everything went black and next thing he knew Dalien was waking up in a stone castle
"what the...."
"finally you get up well hurry up and get dressed so we can head off to get training."
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