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The Ocean seemed welcoming Crimson tides buried my treasure chest Locking away my Heart It was too fragile now at its best I threw myself overboard Descending to the bottom of the bottomless sea Halfway across my world was my Heart And at the other end was only the Key The waves took me in their gentle cradle Slowly carrying me into the depths I thought I was finally going to be free But I had been caught inside a fisherman's net The Abyss fell further away And Heaven wouldn't let me die He pulled me back to the surface Unaware he had even saved my life

Posted by: wolfhound2012 Thu Jun 24, 2010 @ 06:25am

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Commented on: Tue Jun 29, 2010 @ 12:36pm

Commented on: Fri Jul 02, 2010 @ 02:21am


	This is really a good poem. You are very talented , if indeed you did write this. If so , keep writing . I look foward to reading more. :]

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Commented on: Thu Jul 08, 2010 @ 01:14pm


	'Descending to the bottom of the bottomless sea' Try differenciating your word choices, like instead of 'bottom' and 'bottomless', 'bottom' and 'endless', or something. this is good though, i likeee it.

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