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Dying Hopes 2 Dying Hopes 2 (Written by:The Black Angel of Chaosx) But when your around I don't make a sound It's almost like your not even around. Still you wait for me Hoping I come around But knowing my fear will keep me down. Finally i'm free to be there with you But your eyes say sorry...time just isn't with you. Frozen,confused,and afraid I watch you go. Now with dying hopes, the realization of you and me fade...

Posted by: The Black Angel of Chaosx Thu Oct 30, 2008 @ 07:46am

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Waiting Porcelain
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Commented on: Thu Oct 30, 2008 @ 12:52pm


	[I'm your number one again. =] Awesome. ] It's really good. Honestly, there's a flow problem, but the message hits my heart. Hope that helps.. ^_^ I have myself a poem to post too. =] Love ya Chris. ^///^ Can't wait for your next poem. [Especially if it is positive.]

Commented on: Thu Oct 30, 2008 @ 09:35pm


	i like it, it's pretty good, yeah agreed, there is a small flow problem, ah but barely noticable i think towards the beginning the use of "around" might be stressed too much... but overall it does touch ^-^ either way, poetry's poetry, it comes from the heart... and if u could do taht, your a true poet. blaugh great job chris! keep up the good work 3nodding do experiment tho razz try the difference between structured poetry and the emotions... idk.. u might come up with something great! O_O i'll be watching >.> lol

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Commented on: Thu Oct 30, 2008 @ 11:13pm


	Thats a very beautiful poem it moves the reader and brings great emotion I think you have high potentiol Chris, I hope that you never give up and your always their to write such beautiful poetry. Love, heart Hope

Commented on: Fri Oct 31, 2008 @ 06:04am


	Wow...Thank You Everyone who posted here...you guys are amazing. smile I'm glad you like it 3nodding smile biggrin .....Oh, and I will keep that in mind Veda....The next "Dying Hopes" will be much diffrent from my style...which might be a little challenging, but hey i'm up for it. Oh and I will continue writing poetry and always try to do better. Oh and sorry about the flow problem....this is just a first draft but I couldn't think of anything else to add soo I just posted it up....I promise to take my time with the next one.

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Kurisu-s Lil Angel
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Commented on: Fri Nov 21, 2008 @ 01:11am


	well i've been watching and whoa Dying Hopes 3 is definately a turn on emotions O_O i left a comment there already, but now comparing the two, wow... what a turn o_O amazing blaugh big hug keep up the great work!! and u don't gotta be sorry bout flow ^-^ it's just something u gotta practice at, but u have been getting better, so i've seen... read.. lol

Commented on: Tue Nov 25, 2008 @ 07:54am


	Wow....thanks Veda!!!! I really hope you all like Dying Hopes 3. You guys are all awesome...thank you all so much for your support!!!(You 2 Stef heart )

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