oooooooFar off into the depths of space, where the stars cherished my astronomers are more prominent. There is a warring planet called Zoraida the planet was split into three different nations that used a resource of blue energy. It is called Cyber Tarmo, most things were dependant on this energy source, the economy heavily depended on it. There are many types of races that live in this world. There are Elves, Liels, Poms, Luife, Taroons, Taxen Humans ( the humans that came there and lived in harmony for years) and of course the actual Humans. Ever since the news spread about the planet Earth being attacked by an alien race, there was fear that the humans that inhabited that planet would find theirs. Their greatest fears came true. More and more humans are starting to inhabit the planet, but the Zoraidians didn’t give them the easy way of living in their country or planet, they were going to work as slaves. One human by the name of Everard rose up to the mighty elves and other races stealing the Cyber Tarmo crystals, this drove the three continents into arguments and not able to trust each other. One nation called Shahrivar are experts in technology and metal working along with machinery. Their colors are red and orange they live in the eastern continent. The second nation is called Gizem. They are experts in magic and old folklore, most people that live there are mages. Their colors are blue and white and they live in the western continent. The third nation is called Shaw. They are experts in connecting with the environment around them such as the earth and hardly use Cyber Tarmo. Their colors are green and other earth like colors, they live in the southern continent. The Forbidden Land in Zoraida is off limits to young ones there, there are no treaties or truces between the countries. Humans are caught in the middle of the war but after years passed, the countries don’t care who they are as long as they can help with the war.
oooooooThe sky was blue and not a cloud in sight over the horizon the sun was shining brightly and the two moons could be seen in the direction of the south. An elf girl with long platinum blond hair sat on the beach leaning on a spear. She wore all red armor and sighed running an hand through her hair. “Such a nice day to be doing guard duty for a bunch of kids.” She grumbled and groaned. At the end of her spear there was a tube of blue glowing liquid that had a crystal inside that was attached to the blade. “Oiii!!! Don’t do that!” The elf girl abandoned her post and ran after the little elf boy poking the round stone with a dagger, she knew something was going to come out from under the stone. She swiped the boy away from the rock and closed her eyes waiting for an attack. There was no attack.
“Sheesh nani Rayver give us a break!” The little Liel girl sat in the sand twitching her ears. The elf girl sighed and put the elf boy down.
“Sorry guys it’s just I need some kind of action.” Rayver sat down and watched them go back to playing with the stone. “What a horrible day.” She groaned and rested her head in her hands until a tall Luife walked over. He belted out a thunderous laugh that made Rayver jump.
“Oh! Hello Kenta....” The elf girl grumbled and relaxed a bit.
The large Luife sat down next to the elf girl, his beaded necklace clinking together dully and he smiled. Luife’s were large in size and muscle, they had the build of a human but still had their animal attributes such as the muzzle, ears, teeth, hair, tail, claws and eyes. Kenta had a grayish black pelt, his eyes were a deep blue. They say he was part of the Gizem nation but he left because he didn’t like their lifestyle, plus there were Taroons, they are built like the Luife’s but they are tigers.
“What’s going on Rayver? Watching the kids?”
“Yea...” She groaned again and sighed watching them play.
“Y’know, I never had a family.” Kenta drew figures in the sand with his claws.
Rayver looked over at Kenta and pursed her lips together. “You’re lucky in some ways.”
“I’ve always wanted a little brother though.” He smiled and watched the two kids play.
“You can have mine.” Rayver smiled.
“Ahahaha! I can’t take him away from you.” Kenta laughed and smacked Rayver on the back, she was pushed forward at the force of it.
“Owww! Hey! I’m fragile unlike you.”
Kenta laughed again and wrapped an arm around the elf girl’s neck and gave her a noogie. “Ohhhh no you aren’t! I saw you in the invasion of the Gizem bandits.”
“Owwowowow!” She shouted and smacked the Luife on the shoulder and he stopped.
“Ok ok.” Kenta chuckled and sighed. “Such a nice day out...”
“Yea.... You still going to Yuno’s house?”
“Yea... he’s a nice guy.” Kenta smiled and looked up watching a couple walk along the beach, an elf girl and an elf guy. He glanced over at Rayver and sighed with relief she wasn’t looking. Rayver was looking to the side and sighed, she knew there was a couple nearby. Kenta heard her sigh.
“Ahhh, don’t worry Ray. I’m sure there is an elf guy out there for you.”
“Doubt it...” She stood up and picked up her spear out of the sand. “Eleana, Venn c’mon.” Rayer looked at Kenta as he stood up and towered over her. “See you later Kenta...” She put on a fake smile and walked back towards town with the two kids.
End Chapter I
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I think the story could use a little organization in some parts; hopefully they will be corrected. It's just that, it seems like you have a lot of good ideas, but they're just being clumped together at certain parts.
Like the character design (always been a big fan of the "big buddy" type of characters mrgreen Plus, elves are always shmexy)
I'm looking forward to the next chapter in the story ^^