I have no idea why i wrote this i just needed to practice my writing
The eerie silence raced through every vein in my body, making my blood turn to ice. The forest appeared dead; there were no leaves on the trees, and the path was overrun by roots. I started my way forward into the unknown. The wind halted leaving me with only the sound brittle leaves underneath my boots. I could see my breath as the fog started rolling in all around me. Night was approaching quickly.
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One thing though, it's not a mistake but a poor choice of words, where you said: "The forest looked dead" you might want to substitute the word "looked" with "appeared" or "seemed"
But thats just my opinion