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Whatever Gem Feels Like Rambling About
See title. And I do ramble quite a bit at times, so be forwarned.
Another Poem
This is a poem that deals with one of my original stories that I'd like to get published when I finish writing it. It may seem a little strange, but that's because you don't know the concept behind it. It wouldn't surprise me if someone else came up with this idea first, but I'm not going to tell you because I don't want anyone to copy it. If it's really bothering you, though, I guess I could tell you.

This would sort of be from the character Aviran to the main character Reign.

What is this?
What am I?
What are we?
Is there really any differance?
We were born together
We will die together
And yet we've always been apart
We can't be the same!
Just look at us!
And yet we are
We are bound to each other
Our worlds are the same
But then they are not
I a prince, you the sister of an emporer
A war in your lands
Means famine in mine
Our worlds are always equal
And so are we
Our strength is the same
Neither of us can be the stronger
We know each other, without ever meeting
Some fools may say soulmate
But that cannot be!
We are incabable of love for each other
Because we are the same being
Just cut in two
What is this?
What am I?
Your equal, your other, or you?

I may put that in the book if I feel like it, as one of those things that you sometimes see at the beginning of books. But I might not. If you have any comments, fell free to leave them. Bye.






User Comments: [1]
lol_dragon
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Thu Oct 25, 2007 @ 02:20am


I think it's a fine poem. I forgot the type it was... open story ballad thingie? (( T.T i can never remember... I'll have to look it up later maybe))

The poem clearly gives me a heads up to what your writing, and I shall sound geeky with a word by saying I am *cough cough* intrigued *cough cough* to read the book your working on. If it (the poem not the book.... unless you plan to make a ballad which I shall worship you for since I never get past writing the first paragraph) had a stable beat, it would be even better, but it does have a writer's voice which could end up being drowned by trying to force sentence a poem x.x

But I am just overusing fancy words anyways, and I think the poem's a good start to a story, right in one of those page.... things.... (I can never seem to remember the words I need the most and remember the most pointless ones x.x ). 3nodding It's awesomlicius~


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