'Bout my Love for You

• Artist: Solaine Belfours
• Description: It's a love poem I wrote once. Dun flame me
• Date: 08/09/2008
• Tags: lovecloudcloudsunfloat

The sun shining so bright
makes me wish
I could float
on a cloud
with you
my love

Up in the sky
Higher then all
you and me only
in the warmth of that sun

That light feeling
is what I feel
in my head
through my whole body
when I'm with you

while my heart burns for you
like our sun
all I wanna give you
is the softness
of those clouds

Comments

[AngelEyes32]

really liked it. Simple but with feeling.

[PinkFire07]

pretty good.
I understand ur love for this guy.

[Solaine Belfours]

Lol Alitaire, thanks a lot for your comment? I really would have loved it if you gave me some tips and hints to improve, instead of just negativity, but ok.
I know it isnt a great poem but when I was about 14, I fell in love and it ran so deep that i wrote this, for that person.
Even if its not something literary, I would still like to share it with others, cause Im sure there are people that understand this "poem" :3

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

I am heartless! I rated this poem on what I thought of the poem, not any perception based emotions! I may have been rather scathing, but I feel you should not rate a poem so high, when you are only going in "they tried hard" or "it has so many flaws, but, it is about love, so I have to rate it 5/5!" I mean not to offend, but to push others forward so that they may prove me wrong, I am martyring myself

[Little Miss Cupcakes]

i think anyone who says this doesnt deserve a 5/5 doesnt have any idea what they are talking about.
We all wished for love at one point,
and we all felt this way before.
So if you're a heartless person then it would be 0/5.. but if you've ever loved anyone.. then this deserves 5/5.

[Seras_Victoria12485]

Poetry is to tell a story, and I see this story. Granted it hurts to imagine love again, but, that doesn't mean I shouldn't totally give up...yet. I think it just needs a little more tweaking and it would be fine.

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

This poem is ridiculously pathetic. Nothing but an over-used, unimaginative, weak, bland, tiring, saddening attempt at poetry. 0/5!