So, I think for a bit I will snark this fanfic, because, well, I've read a few snarks of other fanfictions just as bad as this one, and would love to give it a go. Beware, there are 40 some odd chapters of this monster! The original story will be in black text while my comments/snarks will be in salmon
Alright.
|| CHAPTER ONE ||
Hi my name is Ebony Dark’ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that’s how I got my name)
I would never of guessed.
with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears
Limpid? Breaking out the big words I see.
and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don’t know who she is get da hell out of here!).
MARRY SUE /WAHMBULANCE
I’m not related to Gerard Way
Whoever said you were o___O
but I wish I was because he’s a major ******** hottie.
Incest is wrong, shame on you.
I’m a vampire but my teeth are straight and white.
FUUUU-
I have pale white skin.
Because we assumed you were a blue creature.
I’m also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts
It's like Face The Strange all over again.
in England where I’m in the seventh year (I’m seventeen)
Thanks for clearing that up.
. I’m a goth (in case you couldn’t tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there.
Because Gerard way shops there?
For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots.
TMI.
I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow sported a black eye. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining
It's called hail m'dear.
so there was no sun, which I was very happy about.
Mary ******** Sue.
A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.
OHH SNAP. IT`S THE FINGER.
“Hey Ebony!” shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!
Exclamation mark
“What’s up Draco?” I asked.
“Nothing.” he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.
They have you on a short leash I see. Kudos.
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AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
I see what you did thar.
 strawberry monochrome · Fri Jun 11, 2010 @ 03:01am · 0 Comments |
