Fireflies

• Artist: 2three4
• Description: One of them romance poems I guess. I wrote it a long time ago. Just figured I share to get everyone's thoughts and opinions.
  
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• Date: 07/18/2010
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[Small lights on a dark canvas,
Small like the stars in the sky,
Yet they light up the field,
So small yet so bright,
They move so gracefully,
Dancing the night away,
Like elves or pixies,
They move,
They blink,
They sure make you think,
Why am I not out there?
Dancing the night away,
Looking for you.]

Comments

[The One in Shadows]

its a cute little love poem. but in ways it could be better.

[PenguinGirl11]

i like it. :3 but i think it would be better if you didnt use the word "small" three times so closely... it kind of ruins it. but anyway, keep up the good work. ^__^