Shooting star, and others

• Artist: ii_pixiedust
• Description: Shooting star
  
  Breathe
  
  After
  
  Footprints ( old but favorite of previous contest)
• Date: 12/13/2009
• Tags: shooting star

Shooting Star
I wished upon a shooting star
And prayed that it would take me far
To a place where i can see
All the things i inspire to be
So ill wish upon that shooting star
And pray to god it takes me far


Breathe
As long as i breathe your here with me
As long as i breathe youll never leave me
So ill hold my breath and make it last
And hold on to all i know
Because once the darkness wins
i know ill lose you


After
After you go
How ever will i know
just how i can go on
i promise ill be strong
so please dont leave me here
so that i wont shead another tear


Footprints
I followed your footprints in the sand
Hoping they'd lead me to something grand
But as i looked up i came to see
That your footprints lead out into the sea
So the only thing im leaving here
Is what ive shead a single tear

Comments

[Fantastic Nightmares]

This is what I think sounds better. As for "After", it sounds incomplete but you got the rhymes down. 4/5

[Fantastic Nightmares]

Breathe
As long as I breathe you're here with me
As long as I breathe you'll never leave me
So I'll hold my breath and make it last
And hold on to all my memories and my past
For I know that if darkness were to win,
You will be gone as if you've never been.