Pianissimo

• Artist: Panic Pirate
• Description: A Musical Masquerade. Perhaps a trickier one to fully figure out.
  This was originally the story for my avi in a contest, but I liked it, tweaked it, and now it's here before you :)
  
  The structure is the way it is for a reason. COMMENTS & Critique (without them, ratings are empty, so please do drop a line)
• Date: 07/14/2009
• Tags: piano music soul revalation secrecy

I didn't recognise you from your eyes

Electrifying behind a gilded mask but

Your arms: swift hands, resilient fingers,

Quivering with passion on the keys to make it

Sing, and show me who you are, show me who you are

Have some composure/ Where is your posture?

"What a composition!" Try to hold the scale you're playing

Only to be led away by a different kind of metronome so you

Run; hitch up your golden gown, waterlogged with

The sadness of realisation sweeping across the hall

Away from me, as I say, in harmonic hushed semitones,

"You did well to conceal your name, my darling,

But you stripped your soul bare tonight."

Comments

[Sunafire]

This is very operatic, and I love it. It reminds me of being enchanted by the theatre and music and for this you deserve all the stars in the world; because it's so well written.

[Indemne 123]

i love it !!!!!!

[x-Asthenia-x]

Simply beautiful.
The enjambament is brilliantly effective here, as well as the spaces between the lines (clever!)

After much deliberation (this was a bit trickier actually!!) I have come up with an analysis that it too long to fit on here and so will IM you about it biggrin

Great job as always Panic