Cant Break Whats Already Broke

• Artist: ADSOC
• Description: REPOST
• Date: 02/10/2009
• Tags: cant break whats already broke

I see the way she looks at you
The same way as I used to
My heart aches everyday
When I see you look at her in that special way
You hold her close and I start to choke
You can't break what's already broke
You come crawling back to me
And turned around and did the same as she
Off to another and she looks at you
The same way as I used to
My heart aches everyday
When I see you look at her in that special way
You hold her close and I start to choke
You can't break what's already broke
You say friends is what we should be
But you never understood the real me
The half that aches for you is not there
And I no longer seem to care
I see your new girl and the way she looks at you
The same way as I used to
My heart aches everyday
When I see you look at her in that special way
You hold her close and I start to choke
You can't break what's already broke

Comments

[Its Vanquish]

Good stuff. I really enjoyed it.

[Kibroth]

It has good form, which for a longer poem is sometimes difficult to pull off. Is it meant to be song lyrics? It comes off as such.

I'd agree that spacing would help give it a less hurried feel. Lines 6&7, 10&11, 14&15, 20&21.

Very good work though.

-K

[xRockstar 202x]

amazing!

[lime green pop]

its good not the best tho
but its true

[XxRoses_LoverXx]

its ok... put a chorus in and speard it out some