Desperate for a Miricle

• Artist: Roxie0616
• Description: Sometimes I definately feel like this, or I know friends who feel like this. They're desperate for some sort of miricle to brighten their day.
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• Date: 12/16/2008
• Tags: desperate miricle misery poem

Crying in
The mists of despair
Our lives took another road


Cries loud and passionate,

Our hearts ached for a miracle

Screams are loudly heard and piercing through my ears

We’re all afraid dying
Maybe even you
Yet we think about ending our lives...for the better

Living life in misery, you wish you had it all (or at least more)

Still crying silently, now its God you’re calling for

Comments

[Guilty_Fills_Over]

I like it but you have to leave it simple...meaningno color's or word's that are slanted just plain simple. 4/5 If you want to see what I mean you can look up my name in the search box and it show's my poems. <3

[[~Femme Fatale~]]

basically, yes I like it. On a more in depth sense I dont like all the different ways you used to make certain words have emphasis, its to much. Loses a lot of meaning.

But I did REALLY like the last line. smile

[tksunshine93]

It's good. Though I find it kinda funny you spelled miracle correctly in the poem but not the description =3 Very good, well written