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That dimming light i see from afar
The shrinking tunnel i am crawling through
To reach the end of disregard
To hope that the stress will go away
The wish i had that disappeared
That i will not go astray
That only rule i wanted to obey
The optimism that keeps me from feeling horrid
To the only reason i have to stay
To the darkness that waits for me
The evil that keep on haunting thy
That i can never succeed
I wait for the time i can be careless again
the time i hoped to just have fun
Fun that never ends no matter what happens
What happens doesn't matter
No, i can't think this way
because it will only leave me astray
To Keep my level head
The longing for freedom of this curse
That i will only now rehearse...
To this i wish to say goodbye
To the careless and funny me
so i can lead a more serious way of life
But still i feel a bit of uncertainty
That because of this i will lose a bigger part of me.
- by Insane Jester646 |
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- | Submitted on 12/02/2008 |
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- Title: The Dimming Light
- Artist: Insane Jester646
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Thank you for taking your time to read this - Date: 12/02/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Lovers Never Tell - 03/21/2009
- Just to let it known, if you want to know why I was so harsh feel free to look up my own in the arena. Good luck, young writer.
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- Lovers Never Tell - 03/21/2009
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Proper grammar, dear, is key and I'd also suggest not using old english 'less you use it throughout the poem and properly. It's quite frowned upon these days because of the confusion is causes. Also this is very bland and is extremely cliche.
Check out the stickies in the Original Poetry/Lyrics Forum before you use your money up with entering again. PM me if you want a real crit. - Report As Spam
- NakedJack - 01/23/2009
- Good poem. Something I thought about as well. I have come to terms with it. ******** work, ******** jobs, they aren't serious, they are nothing. The serious things in life always seem to take a back seat to being a gear in society. At least it seems to be about that to me. ******** the system.
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- babygurl2795 - 12/06/2008
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hmm.... it's a very beautiful poem. This is how I feel sometimes... ^.^ 5/5.
¬nyaa.... - Report As Spam