Alone

• Artist: Phantoms song 95
• Description: ok, i spent months on this, and it is how i feel sometimes, so BE FAIR
• Date: 10/08/2008
• Tags: alone

Some times when your in a crowded room, you feel like your all by your self.
Or when your with your friends, you feel alone, or distant.
are they really my friends? Do I know who I truly am? you ask your self.
Instead of talking about it, you stay sealed like a clam with too many pearls inside.
you stop talking to your parents and they start to worry.
You feel like you are the only person left in the big cruel world.
you put on a act that you are happy so your teachers don’t suspect anything.
you feel completely alone, isolated, like your in your own world.
That is what it is like to be truly
alone.
When you wonder if anyone can hear you when you scream out into the night, that is when your alone.
When you feel as if your invisible, that is when your alone.
When you feel life is so terrible you want to end it,
that is when you are truly alone.
No one knows the pain you go through day to day,
no one cares when you cry in the middle of the night.
You want to here someone call out your name when all feels lost,
but it never happens.
That is how it feels to be truly
alone.

Comments

[1_am_1337]

you should repost this in a different color it is very hard to read ....your "poem" (or collection of your conscious mind) is very unique and insightful ...but this makes you seen like an eeeeeemmooooo

[findulias]

Right, i think this is really good and really sad you feel like that so its hard for me to give you advice but ill try my best...
The rythm is great, but id maybe revise it to be a little bit more flowing as this is about a very strong set of emotions right?
And another thing, the structure could also be improved with better spacing- show gaps?
But this is the way you feel and you have portrayed it brilliantly so well done.