It Wasn't Real

• Artist: Leindor
• Description: Wrote when my fiancee went into the NAVY. I think it's pretty much obvious how I felt... I missed him...
• Date: 10/05/2008
• Tags: wasnt real

I woke that night wrapped in his arms
I could feel him
Smell him
It had to be real
I reached for him and touched his face
stroked it
held it
I couldn't be dreaming
He opened his eyes
Those bright
crystal eyes
He smiled at me
That sweet
crooked smile
He uttered those words
I love you
goodbye
and his spirit left me
I broke
I cried

Comments

[Toni1145]

i really like it.

[R4zorM4n]

"Smell him"
neutral

[Mizzy14k]

hate love
but cant live without it.
live is a b

[Miki-Miura]

wow...its very toughing but the last 2 lines did break the flow like alfuncoot said it but other than tht its good =]

[Alfuncoot]

i really liked it
the last two lines kinda broke the flow
maybe you wanted it to show that like the poem's flow u were broken? i wouldnt take that approach