Lady L.u.C.K

• Artist: timetotell
• Description: Look before you guys give me poor ratings on how supposedly this doesn't belong in poetry then think again.Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, and poetry can be in free verse, it is still poetry all the same, poetry stimulates the visionaries and that's exactly what I try to do here, of course stories have the same effect but I went for more of a poetic approach, this is prose with poetic qualities, this is my stimulation through the formation of words. Like you can define art -_-
• Date: 07/20/2008
• Tags: lady

Lady L.u.C.K has formed the second coming
Shaped my very constitution of intangible sensation
It took the hearts of three, power, wisdom and courage for me
Crimson Red had held power wavering over my head
To attempt to obliterate my wrongness to my loves
Violet Purple had taught the wisdom counter to my errors
To attempt to depict my wrongness to my dear loves
Forest Green had bestowed courage upon my evolution
To attempt to prevent my wrongness to all my loves
One by one I conquered each of the three
Without knowing of the goal of the power of three
As the father of time aged an aged
Everything began to look closer to me
It took the three ladies L.u.C.K., it took there hearts
To combine, to conquer the darkened heart of mine
A success it was, what effort not made in vain
But along the road, two goddesses had fade away
The holder of Power, and the holder of wisdom
Had dissipated into me, to form of what I have so far
Sadness had overflowed within me to mourn there deaths
The cost had been to great for merely the enlightenment of one
The last lady, the holder of courage, leaned over to me to say:
"There, there. The lives still linger within your heart
Their presence will always be felt and remembered, believe the echoes of time"
All I can do is pray for their revival and pray for forgiveness
Until then I must live on and fade away
And keep the promise. To keep the beast at bay.

Comments

[Not Lovable]

* Ignoring all comments *
I love it! ^.^
Keep writing, and I'll keep voting 5! biggrin

[Blood Scylla]

This is prose with poetic property?
That is the same as prosidy, more or less. Which is it?
Is it lacking literary structure or not?
Either way, it's still good.

[fairywaif]

I didn't rate actually... (oops) I meant to. I was going to give you a five. I did it at midnight, and I was only half-awake. I'm sorry I didn't make it clear that I liked it. I thought it was very original, I just expected more traditional poetry. Which makes it better, I think.

[timetotell]

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, and poetry can be in free verse, it is still poetry all the same, poetry stimulates the visionaries and that's exactly what I try to do here, of course stories have the same effect but I went for more of a poetic approach, thanks for tell me that it "seems" like it isn't poetry hence why I probably got a poor rating, I'm going to copy and paste this SOB into the description then.

[fairywaif]

I actually like it a lot, although I thought it was poetry not... free form writing (?). It reminds me a bit of a fairy tale put into a poetic form, which makes sense since many fairy tales are often metaphors. I would try to clean up the rhyme schme if you want it to be poetry. Otherwise, good job!