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The blood flowing from your cuts.
Your body is spilling your guts
Seeing you dying
Left me crying
Why cant you understand?
I wrote this by hand.
The snake of death killing YOU!!!!!
Wrapping around turning you BLUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The fire licking at you
Trying to turn you true.
The blood makes a river.
it freezes as you shiver.
the ice melts
I return with multiple belts
*solo*
The snake of death killing YOU!!!!!
Wrapping around turning you BLUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The fire licking at YOU!!!
Trying to turn you TRUE!!!!
- by iiAm Sasuke |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/19/2008 |
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- Title: The Death Of Love
- Artist: iiAm Sasuke
- Description: I wrote this today
- Date: 07/19/2008
- Tags: death song sadness
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Comments (3 Comments)
- iiAm Sasuke - 03/25/2009
- I have written better, and I'll submit it today.
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- Kowai Kurai - 03/12/2009
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I have to agree with NejiTen_Hyuuga8152; it is rather repetitive and it seems you've concentrated more on trying to make it rhyme rather than putting any feeling and meaning to it.
...It's not awful, but it's not very good either, I think I'll rate it 2/5. - Report As Spam
- Sukuhi - 01/28/2009
- Hm...interesting. It's a bit repetitious, don't you think. It's written kind of sloppy...so I'll give you a two out of five.
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