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bloody night
it was a long time ago not i was just walking doin my thing when i heard a gun shot i started to run as i heard more and more shots all i saw was blood blood and more blood then i heard i few more gun shots and then i had a shock of pearicin pain i was shot at a few times then i started to bleed bleed and bleed and i realized im 15 and im gonna die!! s**t!!!!!!!!!! i felt weeker and weeker and then splat all my blood was drained out.. gone!!!!
next thing i new i found my self pased out and i was dreanched when i went to see wat it was it was blood not just any blood my blood and my arms and legs were hurting me like like hell was it real am i dead am i dreaming i will never know will u??
- by egiptionhottie111 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/27/2008 |
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- Title: bloody night
- Artist: egiptionhottie111
- Description: blood
- Date: 08/27/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Noxious Noise - 02/23/2011
- its got potential but needs better word choice and sentence fluency
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- culekasefuepasiempre - 01/03/2011
- AWFUL
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- OtherwiseDevine - 01/01/2011
- I dont know what this is but it is not "poetry or lyrics" to bad voting ended, i would have gave 1/5 .
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- Zero Ember - 11/17/2010
- It's nice but I think it needs some major revising..2-5
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- phsychosocial - 08/13/2010
- i actually really like it...
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- Our Friend zero1992 - 05/10/2010
- It almost sound like a vampire story,Oh and if you were dead then you wounldn't have write this. I just saying
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- hansonluver77 - 05/09/2010
- after gun shot the sentence shouldve ended...good though!
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