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bloody night
it was a long time ago not i was just walking doin my thing when i heard a gun shot i started to run as i heard more and more shots all i saw was blood blood and more blood then i heard i few more gun shots and then i had a shock of pearicin pain i was shot at a few times then i started to bleed bleed and bleed and i realized im 15 and im gonna die!! s**t!!!!!!!!!! i felt weeker and weeker and then splat all my blood was drained out.. gone!!!!
next thing i new i found my self pased out and i was dreanched when i went to see wat it was it was blood not just any blood my blood and my arms and legs were hurting me like like hell was it real am i dead am i dreaming i will never know will u??
- by egiptionhottie111 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/27/2008 |
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- Title: bloody night
- Artist: egiptionhottie111
- Description: blood
- Date: 08/27/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- JayEagle - 06/08/2009
- Sorry but, this needs work. You need grammar and don't repeat so much. Other than those its pretty good.
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- twistedpersonality_0_0_ - 06/06/2009
- this is amazing... where did you get the inspiration? plz pm me back...
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- Halick - 06/01/2009
- :3 good jobz biggrin
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- HurtRebelChick - 05/31/2009
- like it
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- Mrawesome1997 - 05/25/2009
- i didn't acually read it but i like the strong harsh language an title
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- Kaira Angel - 05/10/2009
- um....a little work.....maybe....less 'and's and more'.'
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- angel_blackfire01 - 04/30/2009
- wow... pretty cool ^_^
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