bloody night

• Artist: egiptionhottie111
• Description: blood
• Date: 08/27/2008
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bloody night

it was a long time ago not i was just walking doin my thing when i heard a gun shot i started to run as i heard more and more shots all i saw was blood blood and more blood then i heard i few more gun shots and then i had a shock of pearicin pain i was shot at a few times then i started to bleed bleed and bleed and i realized im 15 and im gonna die!! s**t!!!!!!!!!! i felt weeker and weeker and then splat all my blood was drained out.. gone!!!!

next thing i new i found my self pased out and i was dreanched when i went to see wat it was it was blood not just any blood my blood and my arms and legs were hurting me like like hell was it real am i dead am i dreaming i will never know will u??

Comments

[theEMOkidprince]

thats a stupid writting

[E d i b l e F l o w e r]

How is it that this has six pages worth of comments?
It's really not very good at all D:

[x_XNightmare_BabiiX_x]

I agree with Dura the Goddess. You shoulf have some literacy about yourself. You've, hopefully, taken english and grammar courses, use them to your full advantage. It will help you along the way, and possible a little farther down the road of your life. It is an interesting peice, but maybe you shoud do some editing next time, before you post.

[Heckie]

5 stars :3

[madiniej]

interesting

[xxxemokittyskittlesxxx]

interesting! i like it. the title caught my attention. =D

[Durga the Goddess]

Allow me to be blunt: if this is typical for you, you cannot write.
Have you heard of capital letters? Apostrophes? Using one exclamation point instead of twelve?

I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt and assume you're about twelve years old. Still, if that's the case, you have better things to do than sit around and write-- go play outside or text or do whatever it is you kids do.

Please.