bloody night

• Artist: egiptionhottie111
• Description: blood
• Date: 08/27/2008
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bloody night

it was a long time ago not i was just walking doin my thing when i heard a gun shot i started to run as i heard more and more shots all i saw was blood blood and more blood then i heard i few more gun shots and then i had a shock of pearicin pain i was shot at a few times then i started to bleed bleed and bleed and i realized im 15 and im gonna die!! s**t!!!!!!!!!! i felt weeker and weeker and then splat all my blood was drained out.. gone!!!!

next thing i new i found my self pased out and i was dreanched when i went to see wat it was it was blood not just any blood my blood and my arms and legs were hurting me like like hell was it real am i dead am i dreaming i will never know will u??

Comments

[swordcrossxx]

Major typo, fix your words and spelling

[Smol Pixel IV]

hun, theres a woundefull new thing called a Spell Check on google,USE IT

[Miss-Grace-Murder]

I have to say, most of the people writing that you need to learn punctuation or capitalization really don't write with it themselves. They don't write correctly or perfectly like that say.

I think it was a nice try and you just have to make the words flow. G'luck!

[X_VII-Zack Fair-IIV_X]

a bit bizarre, you wanna know my opinion,
at leat you tried and thats good.

[Dormant Angel]

now im usualy realy nice...but...this story has no point, no meening. what point were you trying to prove? anything? or just saying random things. like heres my short story, i saw a dog, he chased me and chased me and chased me, then he took a potty break, then he bit me, how did he catch up? i dont know do you? see? dumb and pointless, make sene next time please.

[Hot Cdude]

weird but good

[CJK The Merciless]

mrgreen heart heart heart mrgreen