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Playful,happy,without care.Words that describe a young cub,words that describe a care free youth.I lay,beads of sweat rolling off my tired body,My chest rising,falling,rising,falling.He lay next to me,out cold from pure fatigued. His hand lay with mine,fingers knotted like our hair.My eyes become heavy,and I too drift into a peaceful slumber.I start to remember times,times when we were young,times of joy and pain.Me and the boy,rolling in the grass,laughing.
Running in fields,playing tag,catching frogs by the creek that ran though the woods.Memories of happy springs,hot summers,peaceful falls and winters full of coco.Memories of a boy,frightened,scared to go home.A father,strict,uncaring of emotions.I can remember how he would cry,hiding in his room for days,not even coming out for the ice cream truck.I see a face,and wake up,my sweat cold,and now breathing faster then before.I look over,the boy sleeping,our hands untied,his face in the pillow,him snoring softly.A tear slides down my cheek as I watch the tiger sleep.His stripes,never fading.
- Title: A Different Kind of Tiger
- Artist: csifool
- Description: This is about a person,and why their past gave them the name of Tiger.
- Date: 09/05/2009
- Tags: different kind tiger
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Comments (7 Comments)
- csifool - 04/22/2010
- lol thx, i was writing it of the top of my head.so i wasnt really correcting it.
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- blobguypwns - 04/22/2010
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The last sentence absolutely fulfills it, givine it the full "oomph" that it needed! ABSOLUTELY STELLAR!!
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- csifoolstwin - 10/09/2009
- that was AMAZING!!!! did i mention im ur BIGGEST FAN!!!!!
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- Stellar Witch - 09/28/2009
- Wow!Its so ... well, natural!
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- CannibalWizards - 09/11/2009
- Aw. I really like it. Especially that last sentence. biggrin
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- meeleea - 09/08/2009
- I so agree with Zuniboy! This is great story! The emotions are fresh. The memories are well illustrated and have the nostalgic feel of true recollections. Plus, the allusion at the beginning made me smile. ;3 Again, the vocabulary could be richer, but I guess your words show the innocent times of youth. Maybe try finding synonyms things that repeat themselves, like care free (you had already used without care, and later on you use uncaring. There's a little too much caring going on for my taste)
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- zuniboy - 09/05/2009
- WOW!!! I like this the best. Its kind of like being there without being there. Memories of my time running and playing as alittle boy, having fun with the time I have here and knowing it all good.
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