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I step out side,the air is quiet.I breath deeply,the air is cold.
As I stand there a breeze dances upon my bare neck,sending a chill down my spine.I look at the horizon,a crown of light sits on it's head,like an angels halo.
My gaze travels upward.The sky is dark,except for a waining moon and a few
planes,their lights flickering,as if using Morse Code to call a being to take us from this living hell.I breath again,this time my soul shivers.I close my eyes a feeling of bliss polls over me.The dark sky is lit up by countless stars that dance and sway.A hill sits in the distance, an eye gleaming on its head.I climb the hill,and upon reaching the top I am awestruck.The gleaming eye burning bright with strange and wondrous creatures circling around it,the embers flying into the freckled sky.Then just as quickly as the beauty came it went,when a voice from inside calls me.My eyes open,reluctantly letting the thoughts leave me,only to dispense and disappear into the lifeless night sky.
I enter the house,leaving the thoughts of midnight behind me.
- Title: Midnight
- Artist: csifool
- Description: In a nut shell:figure it out for your self.heresa hint,it compares two things and has a deep meaning.ENJOY ^.^
- Date: 09/04/2009
- Tags: midnight
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Comments (4 Comments)
- ClassyZebra - 09/26/2009
- I'm confuzzled
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- wazowski01 - 09/07/2009
- its very interesting. I was trying not to think while reading this there are many things in it I do not understand. But that's just the way I am. My mind started to wander a little. I think that its very good.
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- Veteran13 - 09/05/2009
- I actually did a lot of thinking and i came up with an answer that I'm not even sure is right but its a shot smile . Well I'm thinking that its comparing the way the girl in the poem imagines the midnight sky and how the midnight sky must really be like and the girl opens her eyes only to find that she was imagining the sight. The poem shows how a girl saw something beautiful of something that would be normal to other people smile . I don't know if I'm right but its a beautiful poem. Good job love. <3
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- meeleea - 09/05/2009
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It would seem I'm useless at finding deeper meanings. xP
I suggest checking for proper punctuation. Your commas are often lacking or misplaced. Watch out for run-ons!
Other than that, there's some good description here. I particularly enjoyed the bits about the sky towards the beginning. - Report As Spam