- "Finally, I'm home!" I yawned as I flopped onto my bed and slowly went to sleep. Hours passed. I was caught in a dream: something or someone was chasing me, yelling "STOP! I want to speak with you..." I woke up screaming and jumped out of my sheets to get some water and go for a walk. I grabbed my keys,went outside, and locked the door shut. I was feeling peckish so I decided to go to Krispy Kreme for a bite. No-one was at the counter, so, I checked the kitchen; not a living soul was there! "Uhhh...." was all I could manage to say. I bolted out of the shop and went downtown. I ran inside Macy's; no one. I checked Walmart; nada. I went to the NIGHTCLUBS and no bartenders, no dancing people, and no DJ. I jogged back home, heart pounding, lungs racing. I unlocked the door, ran to my bed and fell asleep quickly. I had the same dream from when I came home from work. I ran outside AGAIN to see if anyone (hopefully) was there. I went to Krispy K reme and saw two young men at the counter. Itimidly questioned, "I-Is anyone i-in the k-k-kitchen?" One man politely said, "Yes. Yes, there is, miss." I went to see for myself and he was right: bakers were kneading and flipping dough and the smell of fresh bread, cinnamon, chocolate icing floated to my nose. I walked back to my home and lay across my queen-sized bed and said to myself, "I'm home. Home sweet home....."
- by Holy angel1441 |
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- | Submitted on 03/24/2009 |
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- Title: Far From Home (not really)
- Artist: Holy angel1441
- Description: it's about an empty world with no wars, no violence, and everything is silent....
- Date: 03/24/2009
- Tags: from home really
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Agorphia - 07/11/2009
- Haha, kinda random. But cute. You need to think ahead and use descriptions more. You just jump from one thing to the next and you need to transition smoothly. Describe the oddity of a young girl walking in the streets in her PJs! You completely skip the fact that she just got out of bed and is most likely wearing PJs. You have to focus on details such as that. 2/5
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- Holy angel1441 - 06/04/2009
- Wow!! Maybe you should check out my other fictions, like, "Who Knew?" Comment and rate please!!!!
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- Bloodytoaste - 03/24/2009
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That was a cool. I wish that would happen to me.
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