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Here is a short note of my story , i will create a journal of it later , if i win
Edward was a brave warrior for the empire for 12 years , when the kingdom had a new senate,Army guards, King , Things changed. edward was one day choose to guard the king
in a patrol to a nearby city , when it was ambushed by masked men and all were killed also
the king, 2 of Edwards close freinds, and edward were alive still and hurt , edward and his friends are framed for murder because thier farmers and knights say they witnessed the guards did it , later they find out , that the kings double was killed and the real king staged it so vetrans of the old empire wont start a revolution
- by CitzenGuard |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/28/2008 |
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- Title: They will Fall
- Artist: CitzenGuard
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Description:
He worked for an Empire
that he loved very much,
the king , the senate even the army were corrupted and ruthless.
Some had honor for the first empire but time has passed,
things need to be done ,
betrayal , love,war,hate,honor,
sorry if i meant some mistakes. - Date: 07/28/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- La-La-Amour - 05/19/2012
- Nice job! smile
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- joshagman - 03/12/2012
- Ik r
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- Maderka - 02/28/2012
- Do you understand the purpose of a comma?
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- Magical-Athy - 12/27/2010
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you need to organize it... pharagraphs do wonders
nice plot- story line i guess - Report As Spam
- boom_chick13 - 09/16/2010
- you need spell check. baaaaaadly
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- leah81 - 08/14/2010
- well to be honest i think its kinda hard to read
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- Skadi Sundermount - 02/11/2010
- I'm sorry but the structure of that was terrible. I understand you are presenting an idea, what I don't understand is what you wrote. I can't read that!
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