the war sonnet

• Artist: robinprewitt
• Description: a small sonnet about the cost of war
  the picture refrencing this is aloso up for judge
• Date: 09/05/2008
• Tags: sonnet

I sit near the tree ever so tall
Knowing that I'm alone
Trying to stay stiff as a stone
In an effort not to ball

He went to war
Begged me to merry him
I really did love Tim
He always wanted more

Tim's gone now
And I didn't say 'I do'
Or even 'I love you'
To my grate sadness and tears I bow

I lean my head against the door
Knowing that I'll live past this war

Comments

[Im Lavender Hear Me Rawr]

its...sad..and it has incorrect spelling..i know this is not a spelling bee but like a girl said before READ YOUR WRITING BEFORE POSTING IT...heh...(no offence)

[Melliloquent]

As someone mentioned earlier, this is in the wrong section; it belongs in "Poetry and Lyrics". Also, in the last line of the third stanza, it should be "great", not "grate". I'm not really sure what you meant by "... and the tears I bow.", either. Other than those things, you did quite a good job, just make sure to watch the homophones.

[Angel blood_Devil heart]

Good job! I enjoyed this, a sad farwell, 5/5

[Better With A Pen]

Wrong section(poetry and lyrics)
also ball = bawl and merry = marry
Don't mean to be an a**, but read your stuff over before posting.

[count down1]

it's ok

[TheDarkArtist]

Nice drawing

[darkpaws2]

that was good *crys*