Happiness

• Artist: Tasariel
• Description: This is about substance abuse.
  Obviously the speaker is upset that someone they love (family member) is into this stuff.
  A lot of emotion went into this.
  I think it speaks for itself.
• Date: 06/13/2009
• Tags: happiness

How does that make you happy?
I thought you loved me.
You always said you did.
But you love that more, don’t you?
You love what it can give you
That I cannot.
I tried so hard,
I loved you with every beat of my tiny heart.
But it never made any difference, did it?
I never really made a pulse on the surface
Of what you call emotions.
You can’t claim to love me,
When you keep doing this to me,
To yourself.
I asked you once,
Do I make you happy, do I make you proud?
You answered that I did,
But I don’t believe you.
If I truly made you happy,
If I truly made you proud,
You wouldn’t need this addiction to make you happy.
Is this really what you want?
To be alone with your only true happiness?
The happiness I can’t give you,
The happiness without effort,
Without love.

Comments

[Renjii Takahara]

This is such an amazing poem. It really shows a lot of emotion. Thanks for the great read! 5/5, definitely.

[xXRaving PandaXx]

Why must they make it out of 5...(too bad voting has ended....) 278.5 / 5

[demonkyo12]

Amazing poem, and it truly does speak for itself. Very good. I would vote but voting has ended. sad well, 5/5

[Chamomile Dream]

Full of raw emtion and passion, which are two vital elements to any poem; however, you use very few literary techniques; maybe try adding a metaphor here ir there?
Also, a few of your lines didn't make sense. For example:
'But you love that more, don’t you?'
I really do not understand the meaning of that line; however, this may just be my fault, not yours.
Regardless, good job.

Signed, Alexandra.

[AkatsukiYaoi517]

That's beautiful!! 250 ou of 5!!

[pinktacobunny]

On a scale of 1 to 10 that was a.... 379

[zZ_koi no hana_Zz]

five stars of course!
and thx 4 putting me in there!(even thou i had 1 line)[=